I have to agree with your own assesment of your voice, your vocal range isn't suited for this tune at all, the
guitar playing on the other hand was good I enjoyed it, the tone was good as well the only let down is that you replace too many of the cool phrases in the solo with your own thing I know ultimately that's what we want to do to become better musicians but I never liked performers who would get up there and improvise the solo, when you do that you take character from the original piece.
The loner is my fav tune form Gary on this one your bends were not only out of tune but slightly behind the beat, at times you rushed the phrases at times you fell behind I'd say this one out of all the tunes you played was not well executed at all, and the fact that you did too much of your own thing made it
sound kind of bad you were only improvising on his original phrases and were boxed in to much in Am patterns maybe occasionally F#. If you are going to improvise you need to employ different scales and modes to make it interesting to make it more yours if that's what you are going after when you say "my own version" I don't want you to feel like I'm attacking you or saying you can't play I figure you posted this so that you can get some constuctive criticism and input therefore I'm doing it 'cause I don't think I do you any favors by telling you "oh you were good" you still need work on these great songs whether you're going to interpret them faithfully or improvise on them.
Watch you tone as well, the Gary Moore tone was very good but the Steve Vai tone was kind of bad it seemed you were using chorus on your distortion and the Wah wasn't comming thru very clear, also watch the bending and the pinched harmonics you seem to stuggle with thaT a lot.
My favorite tune was R.I.P I don't know if you wrote it but it was quite good!
the singing was better thatn in "Still have the blues" and even though I didn't really see much of a reference in your playing to YJM other than maybe using
the
harmonic minor scale I think your solo here was very very good it built up to something and had intensity what a solo should do so congrats on that. It seems to me that you are better off writing and playing your own stuff rather other people's.
Cheers Jemswirl and I hope you take this review with a grain of salt because I do respect what you did here.
