Join Date: Jul 2001
Location: Berlin, Germany
Re: Yet another poorly mixed song by your truly
Yup, it does only download with IE - strange...
Anyways: As you said, the track isn't really mixed and the sound quality is very poor, which kind of detracts from the listening, but you know that.
As for the playing, you DO have some technique which you should really be making better use of. I.e. the licks around 1:26 are actually pretty cool.
But you should really work on your phrasing. Most of your lines seem to be going nowhere. You seem to start a line with some melodic idea, then you develop it a bit, and then you just keep messing around with the same notes. It's better to cut a certain melodic line short rather than stretching it out too much. Also try to embelish your licks a bit, maybe finish them off with some vibrato (instead of cutting them off abruptly).
The fast bit was really out of context, it just seemed like you said "ok, now I am going to play some fast notes". That whole section was just going nowhere and didn't seem to make any sense. There is nothing wrong with speed, it just needs to be used in a context (kind of "tension and release" idea). If you listen to guys like Satch or Vai, or even speed monsters like Rusty Cooley, they would usually interweave fast and slow(er) parts for a more "dramatic" effect.
Your whammy bar work and harmonics are actually quite good, if you integrate them into the melodic lines, you could get some nice effects.
Anyways, this is my $0.02 (Canadian). I don't know why I am wasting my time if you are just going to attack me, but I figured I'll say what I think.
I think you have potential, you just need to work on being more musical. Just listen a lot, take in as many things as you can, and you'll pick it up.