I think you could make it a little more interesting if you vary the rythm guitar, instead of it just going 'DUUUH DUUH..... DUUUH DUUH DUUUH DUUUH' nearly the whole time. It doesn't sound bad at all. Just a little out of place with the clean guitars melody.
Wow. I am being an annoying critic here. Sorry about that :lol:
I just found this, and I have to say, that sounds awesome! Did you eve make it into a complete song? If so, please post it!! I LOVE the 2 completely different feels to the clean 'happy' track vs. the heavy 'dark' track. Very Devon Townshend-ish!!!